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Lara Coft Baby
09-09-07, 17:32
A while back I wrote a song called dream. Its a song about how I felt when I was in Elementary school. I was very dyslexic (still am) And I had Selective Mutism (http://www.wellpsych.com/SMInfo.htm). It was like living hell on earth going to school every day. And thats what this song is about.

Which one is better?


Dream (Original)

Verse 1
I woke up in a dream today
every thing was different
nothing was the same
I woke up in a dream
And I was living in hell

Chorus
I woke up in a dream
and my life became miserable
I keep feeling as if I'll wake up at any moment
I woke up in a dream
A bad dream
Nothing is how it used to be
I woke up in a dream
I can't control

I woke to find myself in a dream
A dream i can not control
One bad thing after another
I can't help but think i will
eventually wake up to me
normal life

Repeat chorus

Please help me out of this bad dream
Please rescue me from this nightmare
I'm in

Repeat chorus 2x

Repeat verse 1 1x

Dream (revised)

I woke up in a dream today
Everything was different nothing was the same
I woke up in a dream today
And I was living in hell
A nightmare I couldn't control

Chorus

I woke in a dream
And my life became hell
I keep falling,
failing
feeling as if I'll wake
I awoke in a nightmare
Nothing was how it was
supposed to be
I woke in a dream
I can't control
A nightmare
I can't awake from

I find myself in a dream
A dream that feels like hell
Every one treats me different
I'm falling
failing
losing control
Felling broken

Repeat chorus

This can't be real
none of this is real
This doesn't feel right
I woke in a dream
A nightmare
I'm losing control
Please save me from this hell
Save me from this dream
This nightmare I'm living

Repeat chorus 2x

I'm falling
I'm failing
I'm losing control
I'm feeling broken
I'm in hell
I'm in a dream

Lara Coft Baby
10-09-07, 06:06
no one likes my songs? :(

Rynn
10-09-07, 07:18
I personaly like the lyrics of the revised version best. It looks like a touching and sad song. :hug:

Autolycus
10-09-07, 07:37
Nice work, if i had to choose i'd have to say the 2nd one.

Lara Coft Baby
10-09-07, 16:39
Yeah I didn't like the first one so I remade it. I really like the 2nd one best to :p

larson n natla
10-09-07, 16:44
well i suppose its how you feel but maby it could be a bit more happy its actually quite depressing to be honest :) just my opinion well done though i suppose

Lara Coft Baby
10-09-07, 21:53
well i suppose its how you feel but maby it could be a bit more happy its actually quite depressing to be honest :) just my opinion well done though i suppose

Its supposed to be depressing its about the hell I went though in school. How i was treated cause of my disorder. I was misrable in school I cant make it more happy cause my life in school wasnt happy. ;)

Dakaruch
10-09-07, 22:02
the second one is really amazing, i like it, it would give a good heavy metal song imo... it have lots of feeling in it! i like it very much ;)
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TombRaider#1fan
11-09-07, 01:55
wow the second one is amazing.

Tihocan9
11-09-07, 02:12
Great song, a little depressing but creative and shows emotion which gives a feeling. Good Work

Lara Coft Baby
11-09-07, 20:40
Thanks :hug:

2kool4u
11-09-07, 20:48
Nice good job

Lara Coft Baby
12-09-07, 05:39
Nice good job

thanks :hug: