View Full Version : My new fantasy novel

05-05-11, 15:26
Hey everyone! So I read that this section of the forums deals with everything written, so I hope this applies!

My brand new book just came out earlier this month and the title of it is Drylor, The First Artifact. It is a fantasy novel about a man that suffers from amnesia and slowly figures out who he is throughout the book, revealing things he didnít want to know about himself or his past.

The story may seem a little clichť but I assure you it will keep you on your toes throughout.

Below is what the back of the book says, Iím curious after reading it what would you do if you saw it in a bookstore.. Would you pick it up and buy it, put it back, would it perk your interests enough to go home or ask for reviews on it before buying it or what?

When a man wakes up inside a cage that is being carried through
an underground city, he has no idea where he is or what has
happened to him. As Von, a victim of amnesia, is taken to a jail
cell to await his fate amongst elves, humans, dwarfs, gnomes, and
halflings, he is told he is a member of the Royal Guard of Genisus.
It is not long before he is transported to the palace where he
meets an impatient king who eventually returns him to his jail
cell while deciding his destiny.

As Vonís memory slowly returns, he discovers that he is the only
one who can protect Dryloróa world that abandoned himó
from its greatest evil, his own brother. Through his journey to the
truth, Von meets an unlikely group of friends who are willing
to sacrifice everything to help him stop his brother Scarlet
from annihilating the only world they have ever known.

As Vonís past becomes clear and reveals his future, he soon
realizes the only way he can end his brotherís heartless
massacres is to find him and kill him.

So, what do you guys think? All comments negative or positive are welcome. Especially if they are constructive criticism to help me improve my writing skills!

05-05-11, 15:45
The story sounds very promising, but honestly, I think you've revealed a little too much in your synopsis.