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Hazel

10-06-05, 12:56

yep from start to finish, i loved it, i absolutly loved the whole thing. i liked the part where kurtis had just woken up from his op and lara kept trying to punch him in the stomcak an dburst the stiching, then the nurse came in and told lara to leave giving her serious 'evils' lol i liked the part where lara and kurtis got together i think that what most of us wanted to happen. Oh and the chapter where lara got shot by Karel's solsiers and karel looked onto Kurtis eye's and says, "You loved her didn't you?" then kurtis replies, "I still do." the dialog for that whole chapter was increadible i alomst cried when lara got shot and kurtis tried to sturggle free from the soldiers binding him, to try and save lara, that was so emotional. You should publish your story or something coz that was amazing!!

[ 10. June 2005, 14:00: Message edited by: Hazel ]

fallen-angel

10-06-05, 15:25

Wow! I'm really glad you enjoyed it so much! Thank you for taking the time to read it. I'm really glad it moved you to tears. I don't mean that in a bad way http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif I'm just happy that you got into the story so much.
Thanks http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Hazel

10-06-05, 18:14

yeah i loved but the ending seemed at little unfinished to me, so at the end where lara and kurtis got on the bike and drove off afer the nephilm, does that mean that Karel is still alive, did kutis and lara go off to kill them?

fallen-angel

10-06-05, 18:24

Originally posted by Hazel:
yeah i loved but the ending seemed at little unfinished to me, so at the end where lara and kurtis got on the bike and drove off afer the nephilm, does that mean that Karel is still alive, did kutis and lara go off to kill them? Karel was killed by the Nephilim when they rose. Kurtis and Lara set after the Nephilim at the end, and the story is continued in the sequel which I am currently writing. AoD's ending felt unfinished to me so I wanted to give the same feel again. http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif Lara and Kurtis' troubles are just beginning :D

imaginarylight

10-06-05, 21:03

Im not dont yet but so far its awesome! usually I get tired of reading a whole fan fic story when there this long but this is one I'll read to the end its great!

good job!

it also makes mewant to play aod again so im gonna start today. http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif

fallen-angel

10-06-05, 21:31

Ooh, thank you imaginarylight! And everyone who has read it. :D I'd love for everyone to drop a review. Just click the review button at the bottom of the page.
*hands out cookies* http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

Lavinder

10-06-05, 22:00

Fallen-Angel That was A-M-A-Z-I-N-G. Ti's all I can say because your fantastic. Read all of it http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif

Hazel

11-06-05, 11:23

wow i can't wait for the sequal!! i loved the relationship between lara and kurtis . and the sarcastic comments kurtis kept giving lara, and the snappy comebacks lara would come up with! lol!

Laralissa

11-06-05, 11:24

Ooh its interesing. Cool dude! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/whistle.gif http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif

fallen-angel

11-06-05, 17:00

Thanks guys! And thanks for the review Lavinder http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif

Lavinder

11-06-05, 17:13

It took me 2 hours to read it http://www.planetsmilies.com/smilies/sign/2/sign28.gif. I just love reading.

[ 11. June 2005, 18:17: Message edited by: Lavinder ]

imaginarylight

11-06-05, 18:30

omg I just finished wow it was great!

I cant wait for the sequel! Please start soon i cant wait!

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fallen-angel

11-06-05, 20:09

Hey, thanks a lot!
I have the prologue and three chapters finished, but I also have a few other specific scenes down too. I have most of the plot worked through, but I wanna make sure I have it all right before I post it. It should be up soon http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Kay

11-06-05, 23:46

Woww Fallen_angel! This is soo goood! I'm on chapter 17! :D

i love this bit at the start of chapter 17 -
“Why did we stop Master Karel?”

Karel answered without even turning his head.

“Toll booth,” he said.

-- haha!

[ 12. June 2005, 00:48: Message edited by: K ]

fallen-angel

12-06-05, 14:16

Thank you K! And thanks for the review ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Kay

12-06-05, 14:53

Haha your welcome! Yeah i finished reading it last night.. can't wait for more of it! :D

focus

12-06-05, 15:06

omg that was brillant it must have took u forever to write that

fallen-angel

12-06-05, 15:12

Thanks focus! I started writing it a few months before I started posting which was back in November, and then I finished it in early May. So it took about 7 or 8 months to write :eek: http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

Hazel

12-06-05, 17:18

8 MONTHS, that's ages, and you must have kept on changing parts of the speech and story right, well when i write stories, i'm constantly changing parts of the plot and the dialog the characters say. lol. Fallen- Angel, when are you going t start the sequal, and could you give me a brief description of what happens to Kurtis and Lara, and their constant hiding and fighting the Nephilm? Ooo, i can't wait for the sequal its going to be ssssooooo cool!!

fallen-angel

12-06-05, 17:27

Yeah, a lot of it turned out different to how I first started out, what with all the little changes.
I don't wanna give too much of the story away, but it is called When All Light Dies In the first chapter Lara and Kurtis take refuge from a storm, and one thing leads to another... :D

Lavinder

12-06-05, 19:05

I HAVTO READ THAT!

fallen-angel

13-06-05, 14:32

Originally posted by Lavinder:
I HAVTO READ THAT! LOL! It started off as very chaste, but somehow that scene has turned out a bit more adult ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

Hazel

13-06-05, 16:16

lol!
yeah me too, lavinder!! Have you began to write it yet? How many chapter are your intending to write for this sequal? Do Kurtis and lara go their separate ways at the end or do they stay an item? Oh, i can't wait, this is so exciting, i just loved your fanfic it was brillaint!!

[ 13. June 2005, 17:19: Message edited by: Hazel ]

Lavinder

13-06-05, 16:18

Sorry but im not a perv but im into romance and passion.

PM me when this greatness is out.

BTW DO NOT CHANGE IT INTO LESS ADULT lol makes it more intesting as adult http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif

[ 13. June 2005, 17:24: Message edited by: Lavinder ]

fallen-angel

13-06-05, 16:22

Originally posted by Lavinder:
Sorry but im not a perv but im into romance and passion.

PM me when this greatness is out. I didn't mean it like that Lavinder. No offense intended http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/hug.gif I'll be sure to PM you.

Lavinder

13-06-05, 16:30

Lol, I wasnt being offended i was just saying it for people out there who might think im a bit desperate lol http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif

SkyGirl

13-06-05, 16:30

Hey You'll have to PM me too !!
I can't lose this opportunity to read the sequels !! When I was reading your fanfic,trought the way you were writing it sent to me so many emotions at the same time, I haven't felt this for a long time lolol, So I wanna thank you for writing this awesome fanfic, because I haven't read a story like this before !! Keep going !! :D

fallen-angel

13-06-05, 17:47

Hey, thanks SkyGirl. I'll be sure to PM you too. Thanks for reading http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Lavinder

13-06-05, 18:35

How long is it untill you will finish? sorry if im pushy

Kay

13-06-05, 20:18

PM me too! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

fallen-angel

14-06-05, 15:54

Don't worry, you're not being pushy http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif It depends on whether I decide to post it completed or make it a work in progress. I'll probably get the plot sorted out and write at least 6 chapters before I start posting it. Hopefully it should be done in the next month or so.
Oh, and K. I will be sure to PM you too http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Hazel

14-06-05, 18:15

Wicked, i can't wait!! i would post it chapter by chapter if i was you though....unless of course you like keeping your adoring fans waiting in suspence. lol only joking!!

fallen-angel

14-06-05, 18:20

Originally posted by Hazel:
Wicked, i can't wait!! i would post it chapter by chapter if i was you though....unless of course you like keeping your adoring fans waiting in suspence. lol only joking!! heh heh I do have a tendency to leave everyone on evil cliffhangers :D http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif I will post it chapter by chapter when I'm ready http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

focus

14-06-05, 18:36

why dont u just pm everyone on the forum lol hey can u fit me on ur Schedule of pm :D

fallen-angel

14-06-05, 18:42

LOL! I'll be sure to PM you too focus http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Lavinder

15-06-05, 19:06

Ahhhhhhhhhh nooooooo ill wait untill you have every chapter out and then ill read it all in one because I dont wanto be heartbroken if i read a chapter and it finishes lol http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif Be sure to take your time and make it as best as you can. And be sure to add good romance, action, humor ect http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif Oh my... why am i asking you? you will do it already because you are brilliant.

fallen-angel

16-06-05, 12:40

Aww, thanks Lavinder http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/hug.gif
I wanna get it out soon but I'm still taking my time. I always try to update within the week. The longest I took to add a chapter was just over two weeks, but I was on holiday at the time so you can forgive me ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

[ 16. June 2005, 13:42: Message edited by: fallen-angel ]

Lavinder

16-06-05, 16:17

He He http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif Ill keep track on how many chapters you have out and when you have all of them out I will enjoy reading them :D !

No doubt about it.

Hazel

16-06-05, 18:04

yep me too, hows the story coming alond BTW? Could you give us any more hints about what happens, coz im really anxtious to read it! Oh i can't wait this is going to be AWESOME.

Lara's Pistols

16-06-05, 18:30

Wow, i read this a while ago on fanfiction.net. I didn't know it was yours. it was the first lara Kurtis fanfic i ever read and still the best by far! It was such fun. I was sad when it ended. It was romantic but not slushy and had plenty of good action. PM me i would love to read the next one.
good on you! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

fallen-angel

16-06-05, 18:36

It's coming along good. I have the prologue and three whole chapters written and I'm working on the next two. There's kinda a gap in the plot I need to sort out, but apart from that it's all planned out. When I get my other computer fixed I'll be able to add in some of the random scenes I have written on there.
Hints? Hmmm... I can't really give too much away, but let's just say the prologue is very explosive ;) I can give you the first few chapter names to give you an idea as well:

Prologue
Chapter One: Home
Chapter Two: Power Play
Chapter Three: Carpe Noctem
Chapter Four: Waking Hour
Chapter Five: Discoveries
Chapter Six: Falling To Grey
Chapter Seven: Beyond The Maze
Chapter Eight: Industrial Twilight

Although these chapter names are subject to change...

fallen-angel

16-06-05, 18:38

Hey Cazza, thank you for your comments! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/hug.gif I'll make sure to PM you.

Lavinder

16-06-05, 18:45

Just how much feelings are going to be displayed between Lara and Kurtis?

Hazel

16-06-05, 19:35

http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/yikes.gif Wow you've done that much already? you work fast. lol :D
The chapter names are really interesting an sthey make me wonder what happens in each chapter. I'm guessing in chapter one titled Home, that Lara and Kurtis, either go back to the hotel they were staying or lara goes back to her mansion or something along the lines of that.
They walk through the doors of the hotel they were staying in,(the hotel where things got a bit steamy between them)and lara and kurtis both say at exactly the same time, while holding hands, "Home sweet home." they then look at each other and laugh as they said the same thing at the same time. lol. :D
well, i hope you post a couple of chapters of your fanfic soon, because i'm just dying to read it!

Lavinder

16-06-05, 19:40

Im a sucker for romance. :D A good romance puts me in a good mood all day.

Hazel

16-06-05, 20:03

yeah, i agree with you lavinder. romance rocks! and so does action, and humor, i loved the sacastic comments said by both lara and kurtis especially the one in chapter two or three i think, were kurtis has just woken up from his operation and lara asks, "How ya doing?" and kurtis replies sarcastically, "Well, i feel like i just got scewered through the stomach and according to the docters that exactly what happened. Ironic really." http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/vlol.gif http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/vlol.gif that part was halarious, i couldn't stop laughing! lol http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif :D Fallen ANgel keep on going with those brillaint and funny one liners and quick comebacks, they rock! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif

[ 16. June 2005, 21:04: Message edited by: Hazel ]

fallen-angel

16-06-05, 20:27

Thanks everyone. I'm a sucker for romance too ;)
I'm not too good at writing comedy so I'm glad you liked my sarcastic dialogue. I do love to write Lara and Kurtis' conversations. They always turn out in a way I never expected :D http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif
You're on to something there Hazel. The chapter title I mean. I got the name for that chapter after the song 'Home' by 12 Stones which I had in mind as I wrote it. It starts off soft and grows more intense at the end, which kinda reflects the love scene. I'd recommend taking a listen to the song http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif

Hazel

17-06-05, 14:43

i can't wait!! :D do kurtis' and lara's wounds inflicted by Karel heal? Is Kurtis disfigured for life or do the more serius wounds to his face heal? please don't let him not heal, he has to stay the same because hes' cute! ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif
Um y'know the PM thing you've got going on here, with everyone well bascially everyone in this topic has asked you to PM them when you post the chapters? well wouldn't it be easier if you just send a mesage tothis topic saying that youv'e released the chapters ot just start a new thread, and the title being something like "New kurtis and lara fanfic by Fallen Angel" Or "Sequal to my tombraider fanfic"? it seem like an awfall lot of hastle to have to PM everyone.
OH and i think your brillinat at the sarcasim and comedy in your story! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif keep up the fab work and dont forget to inform us when you've began posting thoses Fantasic chapters!! Coz all your fans will be there reading them like a shot, quicker then you can says, lara and Kurtis! lol! :D ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

fallen-angel

17-06-05, 17:54

Thanks Hazel http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/hug.gif
Thinking about it it would probably be easier to post a new thread for the new story. I'll probably title it When All Light Dies or something like that.
Oh yes, and the love scene is a big part of the healing process. Lara's tea comes in handy as well, and they're both gonna have emotional scars :(

Lavinder

17-06-05, 19:59

Lol can you give us a few lines?

Hazel

17-06-05, 21:25

yeah, a few lines of an issue or maybe even a small paragraph just give us a taster, y'know.

fallen-angel

17-06-05, 21:33

Hmmm... well I had a look through for an extract to give, and I decided on this next bit. It's light and fluffy and doesn't give any plot away ;)

“We can’t just give up Kurtis,” Lara protested, “Things have been pretty hopeless for a while but we’ve still pulled through.”

“I guess…”

He rubbed at his eyes before throwing back the bedcovers.

“I need to shower,” he said, staggering off towards the bathroom.

Lara watched him go with a smile on her face.

“You won’t be needing these then?” she asked, lifting Kurtis’ boxers with her left hand.

His head appeared around the door, grinning stupidly.

“No,” he told her, “You keep those.”

The bathroom door shut with a soft click.

Well, there you go. I hope that tides you over until I start posting. I've nearly finished my fourth chapter now and worked through a bit of my plot, so hopefully it shouldn't be too long http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif

SkyGirl

17-06-05, 21:39

“You won’t be needing these then?” she asked, lifting Kurtis’ boxers with her left hand.

Lmaoooooooo your so funny :D
I can't wait to read it !! *eeeekkkk*

Lavinder

17-06-05, 21:43

Best ever :D I have a really bad soft side for romance, cant wait. *claps hands*

focus

18-06-05, 14:43

http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/yikes.gif http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/yikes.gif bows to the MASTER

Lavinder

18-06-05, 16:45

NEED MORE. Lol, sorry im obsessed with Lara .... also Lara AND Kurtis :D

Hazel

18-06-05, 20:31

heh lavinder is hooked, i am too, it like a drug or in Kurtis case a ciggarette, lol. Karel was mean not letting him have a fag and letting him get withdraw symtoms and go 'cold turkey' Poor kurtis.... heres some thing i just put together.
After kurtis has been captured by karel and throw in that prison place, chained to a wall,
Kurtis:"Ah, come on Karel, just gimme a god damn Fag!"
Karel: "Now Kurtis where are your manners. Your forgetting a very important word.
Kurtis sighs deeply rolling his eyes then replies, "...Please..."
Karel smirks evily, reaching into the back pocket of his trousers, producing a ciggarette packet, taking one out and lighting it in front of kurtis just to annoy him. He puts the ciggarette to lips and takes a long drag from it, then exhales the smoke, blowing it into Kurtis' face saying in a malice tone, " Is this what you want?" he says waving the fag in front of Kurtis.
"Yes. Now give me ***king fag before I--"
"Before you What?!" Karel replies, " Come on, try and take it from me. You want it come and get it!" He boasts, taking another drag from the ciggarette.
Kurtis stuggles against the chains that are binding him against the wall, and after several attempts to get free, he gives up out of breath. He hangs his head and refuses to look at Karel who has the biggest grin on his face any human could ever pull. "Y'know what Kurtis. Your going cold turkey."
Kurtis begs, "Please Karel i need....just give me the fag.... You've taken everything else from me."
"Oh yes so i have. Infact i took the liberty of writting a little peom for you.Tell me what you think." Karel says confidently he begins to sing the poem, "Poor little Kurtis your life is so bleak because you've lost everything. First you father, then poor Lara, oh that was such a palarva!"
Kurtis gives karel a look of disgust his eyes burn with fury and he spits in Karel's face, causing karel to violently punch him in the face. Blood trikles from Kurtis' nose and down his chin.
"Dont mess with me boy!" Karel says harshly, "Dont mess with me!" He walks off leaving Kurtis alone in his prison like chamber.

[ 18. June 2005, 22:22: Message edited by: Hazel ]

fallen-angel

18-06-05, 20:57

LMAO! That was hillarious Hazel! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif Kurtis really shouldn't rely on his cigarettes so much.

Hefin

18-06-05, 20:58

Whoa, im impressed!

Hazel

18-06-05, 21:02

heh, thanks i just thought that up on the spot, Lavinder's comment got me thinking. lol. glad you liked it! :D http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/hug.gif
Yeah your right kurtis shouldn't depend on his ciggarettes so much, but hey, its all he had left...and he was probably trying to intentionally kill himself after his life had gotten so 'bleak' acording to Karel anyways. lol. :D

Soma Holiday

18-06-05, 21:07

quote by fallen-angel
The chapter title I mean. I got the name for that chapter after the song 'Home' by 12 Stones which I had in mind as I wrote it. It starts off soft and grows more intense at the end, which kinda reflects the love scene. I'd recommend taking a listen to the song hehe! One of the best from them!! Love to hear that you still like them so much!! WOOOO!!

!It's everything that I need, It's all the truth that I believe, right where I need to be, Just bring my Home!!!!......*starts moshing is the roley computer chair.*

fallen-angel

18-06-05, 21:13

LOL! Yes, Kurtis was planning to slowly kill himself by smoking http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif
:D Thanks Soma for recommending them, their songs rule so much and I find that they seem to relate to Lara and Kurtis really well. http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif

focus

18-06-05, 21:15

lol we are slowly killing our favourite man

Hazel

18-06-05, 21:28

yeah, focus, we're so mean. we love you really Kurtis! lol!

fallen-angel

18-06-05, 21:34

You know what they say: You always hurt the one you love :D http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/whistle.gif

Hazel

18-06-05, 21:42

really? never heard that one before. :D interesting. ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/mischievous.gif lol!

fallen-angel

18-06-05, 23:53

Ooh, for some reason my email alerts were acting up, and I only just realised two more people had reviewed. Thank you Boy Raider and focus http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/hug.gif

Lavinder

19-06-05, 07:51

He he, Good sarcasm, comedy, romance and action surfices me :D

Hazel

19-06-05, 09:46

Hey, heres a little part i just thought of that happens after the part i wrote yesterday.
Karel goes to walk off to leave kurtis alone in this chamber when kurtis murmers with blood still dripping from his chin, "Hey Karel, now its my turn."
Karel stops in his tracks then slowly turns around to face Kurtis saying puzzled, "What do you mean?"
"Well, since you just sang to me, i thought it would only be polite if i sung one back. what do say? care to hear it?"
Karel smiles slightly then replies, "Go on then, amuse me. I could do with a little entertainment."
Kurtis licks the blood from his nose and chin, then takes a deep breath and begins, "Karel Karel you think your so tough. Karel Karel give up the bluff. You think your strong but god your wrong, i hope your liking my new song. Karel Karel, you may think your class, but when Croft returns she'll kick your @SS. She'll beat you hard and then shoot you fast, and then we'll see who has the last laugh!"
Karels face fills with amusement as he begins to clap. "Not bad boy. Not bad. Your sarcastic arrogence never seises to amuse me boy." he says as he waves on hand in the air and bekons for Gunderson to arrive, who is patiently waitng outside the chamber.
Gunderson steps foward through into the room, "You called sir?"
"Yes. you just missed Mr. Trent's latest outburst. It was quite funny actaully. He sung me a song." karel says his tone now quite serious as he hands Gunderson a whip and orders and several other guards to detain kurtis while Gunderson removes the shackles that bind his hands, to the wall and attaches then to Kurtis' ankles. The guards push Kurtis down the stonefloor as he struggles to break free as Gunderson attemps to put the shackles around his ankles. This results in Karel slowly walking up to Kurtis and forcefuuly botinh him in the face, to silence him and to stop him struggling.
After Gunderson has put the shackles round Kurtis ankles Karel hands him the whip saying in a malice tone, "Give him 50 lashes! hE needs to be disciplined"
Gunderson nodds then takes the whip, and begins to lash Kurts who is still on the floor. The other guards step back and stop holding Kurtis to the ground, watching as Gunderson whips The Lux Veritatis. Kurtis screams in pain as the whip cracks hard against his back, and after 50 cains with the whip Gunderson stops.
Karel walks up to Kurtis and grabs hif face pulling him up towards him whispering in his ear, "Don't do that again, understand? Or the consequences will get much worse."
Karel lets go of Kurtis' face then goes to walks out of the prison when Kurtis bits back shouting, "Was that it!? If that was supposed to be my punisment then i'm very dissapointed Karel."
Karel turns to face kurtis who is now smirking. He walks up to Kurtis, grabs him by the collar of his shirt and drags him up to his knees, then aggressivly punches him, full force in the face sending Kurtis sprawling into the cold stone wall behind him.
Karel then spits at Kurtis, then smirks nastily as he once more trns his back and walks out of the room only to once again hear Kurtis voice say sarcastically, "Y'know what Karel? My dead grandmother could hit harder then you!"
Karel stops now fuming with anger, he turns to Kurtis, his eyes now enfuriated and burning with anger. But he does nothing about it and instead, holds his tongue and walks off out the door.
"@sshole", Kurtis whispers to himself as Karel steps out through the wooden door and finally leaves Kurtis to rot.

[ 19. June 2005, 10:52: Message edited by: Hazel ]

fallen-angel

19-06-05, 14:27

LOL! That was hillarious again Hazel. I love Kurtis' little song :D http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

focus

19-06-05, 14:41

Originally posted by fallen-angel:
You know what they say: You always hurt the one you love :D http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/whistle.gif well if thats true i must have done every possible hurtful thing to kurtis and about that review sorry i didnt say more i was trying to get my screen name in the sentence http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Hazel

19-06-05, 14:49

http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif Thank Fallen-Angel glad you enjoyed it! lol! :D yeah i thought kurtis' song was quite catchy too. My stuff isn't as good as yours though, your the master! lol. http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif keep up the fantasic work BTW!
Make sure to keep us all informed about when you begin posting those chapters! ;)

fallen-angel

19-06-05, 16:13

Thanks once again Hazel http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif
All of my chapters are named, and I think I've basically worked through that roadblock in my plot.

Prologue
Chapter One: Home
Chapter Two: Power Play
Chapter Three: Carpe Noctem
Chapter Four: Waking Hour
Chapter Five: Discoveries
Chapter Six: Falling To Grey
Chapter Seven: Beyond The Maze
Chapter Eight: Industrial Twilight
Chapter Nine: Translations
Chapter Ten: The Memory Remains
Chapter Eleven: Time Reveals All
Chapter Twelve: The Storm
Chapter Thirteen: Rain
Chapter Fourteen: Desperate Measures
Chapter Fifteen: The Tide
Chapter Sixteen: Screaming From The Heavens
Chapter Seventeen: The Watchers
Chapter Eighteen: Crossroads
Chapter Nineteen: Baptism of Fire
Chapter Twenty: Valley of the Dead
Chapter Twenty One: Ashes
Chapter Twenty Two: Hand Of Blood
Chapter Twenty Three: Departure
Chapter Twenty Four: Black Days
Chapter Twenty Five: Afterlife
Epilogue

focus

19-06-05, 17:08

The chapter names sound so cool, im so excited cant wait till u post them up , whoah i dont usally get this excited about a story only when its harry potter. wait is it lame to like harry potter books? ah well if u like harry potter fallen-angel u could be the next j.k rowling. http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

fallen-angel

19-06-05, 17:12

Well, I do like Harry Potter but I'm a Lord of the Rings girl myself. Thank you for the compliments http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/hug.gif http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif

Lavinder

19-06-05, 17:48

Fallen-Angel Me and you are sortof the same.

 I listern to evanescence I LOVE Lord Of The Rings I adore eyeliner I LOVE Harry Potter books

http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/jumper.gif

fallen-angel

19-06-05, 17:52

Good to hear it! You sound like a great girl Lavinder http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/hug.gif
Remember: God's greatest gift to women is eyeliner http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

Lavinder

19-06-05, 18:18

:D Makes the eyes so glassy and shiny and pronounces the colour. Its just awsome.

focus

19-06-05, 19:04

LOL who needs a website of fans for tombraider when we can have one on eyeliner. okay thats 3 fans of eyeliners (extra one counten me) i swear nearly every week i buy a new one http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/vlol.gif

fallen-angel

19-06-05, 19:20

Good to hear focus! :D
They stopped making the eyeliner I use, so I'm gonna have to make it last...

Hazel

19-06-05, 19:42

i like eyeliner and mascara but i don't use it that often only on special occasions or if i'm aving a rough day. lol.
So Fallen-angel the chapter titles sound so mysterious and interesting, when are going to start posting the chapters? How far along are you? What chapter? OH BTW is there going to be another sequal to this one your currently writing or is this one going to end the story?
Thanks! :D http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

[ 19. June 2005, 21:11: Message edited by: Hazel ]

fallen-angel

19-06-05, 22:37

I've finished writing chapter one, two, three and five, and done the majority of four, seventeen, eighteen and twenty. This story will end the trilogy, but I'm planning another fic set two years in the future, a Kurtis fic and an alternate AoD continuation which is much more adult ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

Hazel

20-06-05, 14:22

cool! i can't wait to read those either! so will lara be fearturing in the kurtis fanfic? or is it about kurtis training as a lux veritatis?
An alternate AOD conuation? Hmmm sound interesting wonder what happens in that one. Does Kurtis die from where Boaz impalles him and lara joins the dark side with Karel or something?

fallen-angel

20-06-05, 14:54

Well, the Kurtis fic will cover his past, from his Lux Veritatis training to the Legion to his father's murder. I've only written a bit of that, and it's going to contain a certain scene where Kurtis does pushups in the rain ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif
I was wanting to do a darker AoD continuation anyways, and then I had a dream which gave me a good idea for it. There's also a song which is the basis for Lara and Kurtis' relationship in it.

Kay

21-06-05, 10:33

I cant wait for the next part of the story fallen-angel! :D

Are your exams over yet? Mine are! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/jumper.gif

fallen-angel

21-06-05, 10:59

Congratulations K http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif
I have one more exam tomorrow and then I am done! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/jumper.gif

Hazel

21-06-05, 14:39

I'e just had a ton of Mock GCSE exams. God what a nightmare. I';m just glad there all over, for now anyway. lol!

Ah, yes the scene where Kurtis does pushups in the mud when its raining and his dripping wet shirt clings to his body, is that the scsne your talking about?

Are Lara and Kurtis still 'Together' in your darker continuation of AOD that you are planning to write or are they enemies?

SkyGirl

21-06-05, 14:43

Originally posted by Lavinder:
Fallen-Angel Me and you are sortof the same.

 I listern to evanescence I LOVE Lord Of The Rings I adore eyeliner I LOVE Harry Potter books

:jmp: Ah me too ! :D

fallen-angel

21-06-05, 15:27

Yes SkyGirl, we are the same http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif
Yes Hazel, it is that scene :D ;)
In the darker AoD continuation Lara and Kurtis are both on the side of good, but their relationship is gonna be a lot more complicated.

Kay

21-06-05, 15:35

Originally posted by Hazel:

Ah, yes the scene where Kurtis does pushups in the mud when its raining and his dripping wet shirt clings to his body, is that the scsne your talking about?

What!? Where's that part!? :eek:

Hazel

21-06-05, 15:40

oooooohhhhh, sounds interesting. How much more complicated can their relationship get?! well, i supose they could argue all the time and their pasts could be explained in more detail....
Oh, The real bad guy might not be Karel this time...It could Kurtis' long thought dead daddy.
Heh,
Kurtis:" I'll kill you, you monster. You killed my father!"
Kurtis dad Konstinantin (or whatever his name was): "Kurtis' I am your father." He steps out the darknes revealing himself to Kurtis who' eyes widen in shock, as he screams,
"NNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!"
"Kurtis Join the dark side."
"Never!" Kurtis screams.
" I'll pay you in ciggarettes..."
Kurtis smiles, "Oh when you put it that way, how can i refuse!"

Hazel

21-06-05, 15:49

Originally posted by K:
<blockquote>quote:<hr />Originally posted by Hazel:

Ah, yes the scene where Kurtis does pushups in the mud when its raining and his dripping wet shirt clings to his body, is that the scsne your talking about?

What!? Where's that part!? :eek: [/QUOTE]Oh, Fallen Angel mentioned this is another thread, i think it was the 'kurtis appreciation' thread or the 'kurtis lovers' thread, but i'm not sure!

fallen-angel

21-06-05, 16:45

Originally posted by Hazel:
Oh, Fallen Angel mentioned this is another thread, i think it was the 'kurtis appreciation' thread or the 'kurtis lovers' thread, but i'm not sure! Yeah, I first posted in there when I got the intitial idea. Needless to say there was a lot of support for the idea ;) It's going to be in my Kurtis fic which I will post after the sequel http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Hazel

21-06-05, 20:22

cool, you must be working on this sequal and the other two fanfics like 24-7! Or you must be a quick writer/typer. lol.

fallen-angel

21-06-05, 21:22

Originally posted by Hazel:
cool, you must be working on this sequal and the other two fanfics like 24-7! Or you must be a quick writer/typer. lol. I try, but I tend to take on way too much at once. In the pipeline I have my sequel, the story set after that, my alternate AoD continuation, a Kurtis fic, an O.C fic, a 24 fic, an original story and my set of novels. I love to write :D http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

Hazel

22-06-05, 18:04

wow, thats alot! i like to write too, i 'm currently wrting a comic strip with my friend at the moment, the plots coming along nicley, but it taking along time to write as i have to sort out my priorities, homeweork first then my story. Tsk, homework and courcework, such a hastle! lol!

fallen-angel

22-06-05, 21:01

Originally posted by Hazel:
wow, thats alot! i like to write too, i 'm currently wrting a comic strip with my friend at the moment, the plots coming along nicley, but it taking along time to write as i have to sort out my priorities, homeweork first then my story. Tsk, homework and courcework, such a hastle! lol! That sounds cool. I'm finished with my exams now, but I certainly used to put writing first a lot, even though I shouldn't have.
100th post to this thread ;)

Hazel

23-06-05, 14:25

yeah, i was really behind on my courcework, partly because i spent too much time on my story and mainly because i was ill for a month, but thankfully i've caught up with everyone else now and i can continue on with my story! phew! lol!
congrats on the 100th post btw lol!
Have you considered joining the ONe strange adventure thread? if you haven't already checked it out it a story that some memebers have started and its about lara meeting other charcters from other games. It really fun as people from the forum (anyone) can write a part of the story. You should join, you'd be good at it since your stories are the best! (You dont have to join if you dont want to it was just a suggestion.)
When are you going to begin posting the chapters for the sequal of AOD, when all light dies? Take your time im not trying to rush you, it's just well im anxtious to begin reading as your stories are so gripping!

fallen-angel

24-06-05, 16:46

I'll probably check the thread out sometime, yeah.
I've just finished my fifth chapter, meaning I have the first five chapters finished. I am going on holiday soon though, meaning I won't be able to start posting for a while. I am going to do a lot of writing on holiday though. Thanks for your interest http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Hazel

24-06-05, 16:59

well, have a good holiday, i hope you don't mind me asking but where are you going for your holiday?
Do you think you'll start posting next month or will it be later or sooner that that?

fallen-angel

24-06-05, 17:47

I'm going to Italy, even though I'm dreading it. My family is extremely boring and embarassing, and my sister doesn't even come with us anymore. The only thing that keeps me going is my music and my writing, so rest assured I will be doing a lot of it. Hopefully I can start posting by the end of July http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif

Hazel

25-06-05, 10:32

wicked!! well i love goin on holiday with my family, especially my grandad, he rocks. He's 61 and he has 3 moterbike and 2 jet ski's how cool is that! lol! i wish i was like him when i'm 61!
Can't wait till the end of july! for lots of reasons actually, it the beginning of the summer hols, my sister birthday, and your releasing your nre sequal, yay!

Lavinder

25-06-05, 16:01

Lol, yay i cant wait for end of july aswell. Its my sisters Bday too! :D

Hazel

25-06-05, 16:04

lav, cool, everthings happening in july! lol. HOw old will your sister be? Mine will be 13, shes my younger sister.
Lavinder, do you like writing stories?

Lavinder

25-06-05, 16:13

My sister will be 16 http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif I love writing but i dont save non of it because i dont thinks im very good at it http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif

Hazel

25-06-05, 16:21

oh, cool, i'm glad you enjoy writing because have you checked out the One strange adventure thread? :D
In case you haven't its a story that some memebers of the forum have started and its about lara meeting other charcters from other games.
Althought the story has now ended there is going to be another one soon and well as you enjoy writing would you be interested in participating? I have joined and added my ideas and it's really fun. Check it out if your interested. :D
If you are interested do you think we should write the next one as a conitinuation of AOD or Last Revalations?

focus

25-06-05, 22:19

ok if u dont mind me butting in i think it would be so cool if u would do a conitinuation of AOD and the One strange adventure thread was deadly , u probaly have all ready started the new story , i really should have checked that thread first before i posted this ah well http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/vlol.gif

Lavinder

26-06-05, 09:29

I will look into it Hazel :D

Hazel

27-06-05, 13:21

OK, oh BTW Fallen-angel, is the love scene yur writ in chapter one more adult than the first love scene between Kurtis and Lara in the chapter 12 i think it was called, the calm before the storm? :D

fallen-angel

27-06-05, 20:38

Hmmm... I think it's kinda simillar to the first love scene, but where that one was passionate and urgent, this one is slower and more comforting. Lara and Kurtis have a conversation beforehand that reveals some disturbing things, and the act of making love is an act of comfort and escapism. Also, this scene kinda tapers off, giving you the chance to use your imagination ;)
Just wanted to say as well that I have got a lot of writing done the past few days, and I've completed chapter six and nearly finished seven, meaning the first six chapters are ready. I want to sort out the middle part of my plot before posting though, but that will probably be seen to whilst I'm on holiday http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/smile.gif

Kay

27-06-05, 20:52

For goodness sake! .. everytime i see this thread move up the Fan artwork etc section. .i keep thinking you're writting to say you've put one of your new chapters on the net! :rolleyes:
Haha....dispite the fact that i've read that you're putting your stuff up around the end of July. http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/c-1.gif i'm still expecting you to put it up now lol Silly me.
So......
Hurry up writing Miss! http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/mischievous.gif http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

[ 27. June 2005, 21:53: Message edited by: K ]

Hazel

29-06-05, 17:46

K, dont be mean.....you have to be patient with F-A, she probaly can;t work under stress and will inform us when she is ready to post.
Yeah, i can't wait till july, i'm getting rather excited about it now, ooooooohhhhhh this is going to be great!!
wow, the love scene sounds great F-A,hope you dont mind me shorting your name, i have a tendancy to do that. lol. How disturbing are the things that Kurtis and Lara talk about in their convosation before things get a little er, whats the word, out of hand? Is it about their past and background or maybe Kareland the Nephilim or how Karel tortured Kurtis?

fallen-angel

29-06-05, 17:59

Don't worry about it, K isn't being mean. It doesn't stress me at all, I'm actually very eager to start posting, but I need to sort a bit more of my plot out first.
Sure you can sorten my name :D
One of your guesses as to the subject of Lara and Kurtis' conversation was right Hazel, but I ain't saying which one ;) http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif

[ 29. June 2005, 19:00: Message edited by: fallen-angel ]

Hazel

29-06-05, 18:17

oh, your mean, waaaaaahhhhh, *begins to cry hysterically* lol :D only joking. http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/thumb.gif
You like torturing people by leaving them in suspence dontcha Fallen-Angel? lol. ;)
I'm eager for you to start posting too. Can't you at least post the prologue and chapter one? Or another little teaser from a chapter, like before, only about say a paragraoh, just to keep us satisfied for the time being? Man i think i'm addicted to your stories, F-A!
i can't wait anymore!! :D Its too difficult! *deep breaths* I must contain myself and wait untill the end of July.
lol! :D When you do begin posting will you inform us on this thread or will you start a new one with the title, when all light dies-fanfic sequal?

[ 29. June 2005, 20:18: Message edited by: Hazel ]

fallen-angel

29-06-05, 21:03

I will post the story in a new thread when the time comes. I want to get at least ten chapters done before I post though.
Here is another extract, so you don't have withdrawal symptoms http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/tongue.gif I always seem to pick parts with Lara and Kurtis banter. I love writing their dialogue too much ;)

"Kurtis?" she whispered unnecessarily, "Do you know where the hell we are?"

"Of course I do," he shot back, "We're lost."

Lara sighed and stopped in her tracks. She prided herself on her exceptional sense of direction even in the darkest and deepest tombs. There was usually something with which she was able to find her way; ancient markings, a higher concentration of traps or even a simple draught to tell that she was near the surface. Now though she was lost inside a building. A building. Lara Croft, the famous explorer could not find her way around a bloody building.

"Don't worry about it," Kurtis said, noticing the look on her face, "I'll just use my farsee."

He lifted his arms out before him, wrists together and palms outstretched. Then he closed his eyes and pushed his vision out of his body. At once all of his senses were heightened. Everything was covered in red as his vision wandered down the corridor and took a left turning.

A few minutes later Kurtis stumbled back as his vision returned to his body. Lara put a hand on his arm and steadied him.

"Any luck?" she asked.

Kurtis nodded.

"The warehouses aren't too far away. It's quickest if we go through the air ducts."

Lara nodded.

"You better go first so you can lead."

"Sure," Kurtis walked over to the wall, lifted a metal covering off its hinges and gently lowered it to the floor. He squatted down and peered inside the vent, then turned back to Lara. "Don't use this as an excuse to stare at my ass, Croft."

Lara cursed her cheeks for turning a deep shade of red.

"Just get in the damn vent Kurtis," she glowered, unable to come up with a witty comeback.

He smirked and clambered inside.

Lara followed after a few moments, keeping her eyes resolutely set on Kurtis' back.

Enjoy http://www.tombraiderforums.com/images/smilies/wave.gif