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Old 06-09-12, 17:10   #21
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less than 3 hours left?
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Old 06-09-12, 19:45   #22
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Crap crap crappity crap. I'm not able to finish before the deadline. I've mostly tidying to do, which I was going to do today, but with this headache, I'd be lucky to post in anything coherent.
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Old 06-09-12, 21:41   #23
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Post what you've got anyway?
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Old 07-09-12, 08:06   #24
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My apologies; I should have closed this yesterday evening


Don't worry, Rai. I'm extending the deadline to Sunday 9th September 21:00 GMT. That way, you can post what you have and we'll have four entries instead of three If it's still unfinished, post it anyway - it won't be judged but we'll enjoy what you have and bug you to finish it when you get chance
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Old 09-09-12, 20:01   #25
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This is what I have so far. It's not finished and probably riddled with mistakes, so it's not really an entry. But go ahead and read it. It would have been more suitable for the Worst Fan Fic comp :

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The cavern was so dark, even with a powerful torch, there was little to be seen beside what was directly in front of the torch beam. The walls here were no more or less than grey and plain with moss growing in clumps here and there. There were no markings save those naturally by water dripping steadily down them. The occasional stalactite made moving through the cavern a little uneasy, but generally speaking, this cavern was easier to navigate than some Lara could remember. In fact, the place was distinct only by its ordinariness. Except for the door. The door, Lara had managed to work out, was the entrance to the tomb she'd been searching a good few days to find on a planet that was made mostly of a labyrinth of caverns and tunnels. She knew it must be the correct one as she'd seen this door before - or at least its counterpart back on Earth.

Lara was currently stood in front of the door examining its fixtures. It took her moments to notice they were decorative only.

"Damn." she said aloud. Two green images to her right side flickered gently.

"What's up Lara? Asked hologram Zip.

"The switch for the door is completely useless. There's no way in. This door must be a dummy, a diversion. I'm going to have to find another way in." Lara replied, a frown forming.

"Can't you teleport yourself in? You know, how all the space archaeologists do it? I went to a lot of trouble procuring that teleport badge for you." Said Zip, grumpily.

"No, lads. I'm going to have to use the old fashioned methods."

"What, dig?" said Alister, aghast.

"Don't be ridiculous, Alister. I mean the other old fashioned way." Lara said with a glint in her eye.

"Oh boy. Better put your ear muffs on!" warned Zip.

Lara dug out a hand grenade from her backpack. She tossed it at the door, then ran and dived for cover.
There was an almighty boom! The whole cavern shook with the aftershock. Zip and Alister's holograms flickered a few times before going out altogether.

"Finally," said Lara. She knew that Zip would have the holographic devices working again soon, but for now, "a bit of quiet. I can concentrate now." Lara walked toward the opening she'd created. "Lovely." She walked into a small room. It was as plain and uninspiring as the cave without. This did not bother Lara. She moved around the small space, her hand smoothing the walls as she went. Finally she located the tiny button she needed. She pressed it and a near invisible trap door slid open at her feet. A glass panel was revealed. The writing on the panel was familiar to her; she'd seen it before on a remote island off the coast of Egypt on one of her first missions. It seemed a lifetime away. This writing belonged to an ancient alien civilization long lost to both the planet she was on, Altan and Earth. The code was simple enough to decipher. Within moments, Lara had touched the relevant symbols and was now stood waiting next to the panel. There was beep, then with the sound that resembled a bus door opening, the floor vibrated and slowly another trap door slid open revealing a chute that fell almost completely horizontally to the floor.

Maybe communications would be more difficult down there. Zip and Alister were helpful, it was true and at times, especially during long journeys, but there were times, such as this, when she was on the verge of discovery, when silence was definitely golden.
The concrete slide was lined in gold and Atlantean writing covered the walls. Lara lowered herself to the opening and swung her legs over the edge. Then, she took a deep breath and launched herself down the chute. It seemed to go on forever; the tunnel curving left and right and back in on itself. It was like an enormous concrete snake. So fast was she sliding that Lara was feeling quite dizzy. She had almost stopped enjoying the ride, when she was flung forward. Lara rolled to lessen the impact as she toppled onto the floor of a large chamber.
It was magnificent. Murals were painted on the, just as they had in Egypt, except, here there were scenes which depicted being which were definitely not human. The triumvirate were here in beautifully preserved detail and colour. Lara took her time inspecting the paintings and the carvings on the pillars that were lined like soldiers along each side of the room. Peculiarly, unlike her venture into an Atlantean pyramid, there was no lava here. Perhaps the lava had been needed back one Earth to replace alien technology. It soon became clear that this chamber, as impressive as it was, was not the chamber she'd came for. She walked on noticing a series of discs attached to the walls. Each disc was coloured either gold, silver or bronze and, it appeared that they were connected via cracks in the wall that lead like an intricate web to the far wall where a golden door was bolted shut. Each 'crack' had some form of liquid or gel in it, a glistening burnt colour that, Lara determined, should be flowing, but was currently static. Each disc had an Atlantean symbol etched in silver on it. A puzzle then, surely?

Lara hovered a hand over one of the discs. There was no heat being omitted from them. Cautiously, she took out a stylus from her pack and touched the disc gently with it. Nothing happened. So she tried her fingertips. As her flesh didn't freeze or burn off, she felt that it was safe to try properly. She lay a hand onto the disc and tested it for movement. With light pressure the disc went further into the wall, just like a button. Wary of activating she wasn't ready for, she removed her hand before pressing the sic in further. There were ten discs, each with a different symbol and a web of gold gel. This would take some thinking. Perhaps there was a clue. She looked at the ceiling as if looking for inspiration. There was a picture, a map of sorts, of circles (the discs no doubt) painted on the ceiling. Each circle with its line led to a rectangle (the door). She could see now that the lines and discs formed a pattern. She looked at the map and back at the discs on the wall.

After much deliberation, Lara had decided she knew enough to complete the puzzle. She went around the room, pressing discs in what she considered the correct order. One by one, the discs lit up and with it, the cracks of gel. The gel lines changing form gold to a different colour. A rainbow pattern that connected to a square panel on the wall. Minute discs on the panel also lit up. The double doors slowly slid open.
It was then that two etchings on either side of the door fizzed as if a current was running through them. Next moment two mutants had freed themselves from the wall and were firing...(was that Eitre?)...out of their clawed hands.

With lightening speed, Lara had her ray pistols at the ready and cartwheeled to cover behind a pillar and fired back at the pair of mutants. These two didn't have wing and seemed fairly slow on their feet. Perhaps due to having been inanimate for so long. Lara tried something as they advanced to where she was hid.

"Och Eshiver!" she yelled. It didn't work.

"Well, it was worth a try." Lara ran for the next pillar, firing all the time at the creatures.

It was a long arduous fight. But within a few minutes, each mutant fell to the ground. Lara winced as a burn to her shoulder throbbed painfully. She checked it and saw a red raw patch of skin there. She took out a salve from her backpack and applied cooling gel to the area. It immediately eased the pain and within a minute she continued on through the doors.

The room beyond was dazzling. The walls were almost completely covered in gold etchings of Atlantean symbols and a replica of the mural in the previous chamber depicting a scene of the Triumpherate: Natla, Tihocan and Qualapec standing around a dais, very much like those Lara had encountered in Nepal and Bolivia. The dais was glowing green. Tihocan held Excalibur in one hand and Qualapec the completed Scion. The floor was covered in a thick deep red carpet: the overall impression was of standing in the centre of a volcano. Lara stepped into the room, her booted feet sinking slightly in the thick carpet. At the very centre of the room was a pedestal decorated in emerald, gold and red. Hovering slightly above was the prize Lara had come for: The Scion itself, complete and unharmed.
This is what she’d come here for, what she’d spent years researching for. A good portion of her fortune had been spent on the teleport technology Zip had help procure for her. She’d fought Jacqueline Natla and almost died in the process. Her former friend was lying on the ground, gravelly injured because of this. Her moment was here, on this planet that the Dais network had brought her to. The Scion spun slowly on its axis. Lara took in its brilliance, taking in every second of her accomplishment. She stepped toward the pedestal. Her pistols now re-holstered. She reached for the scion. Her hand was inches from her reward for all the hard work.

“Don’t!” It was a woman’s voice. Surely, after all this, Natla couldn’t possibly have survived and returned to her home planet? Lara span around looking for the source of the voice. A figure approached from the shadows, a sword clear in her hands. It wasn’t Jacqueline Natla. This woman had long waist length dark hair. She walked regally towards Lara. Her dress was much in the same style as Natla’s had been only blue and silver. She wore a diadem of silver and d emerald across her forehead. Her green eyes cold but so familiar to the tomb raider before her.

“Mother...,” said Lara, stunned. She felt she was seeing an apparition. The woman who stood before her was, in no doubt, her mother. Yet she had not aged since the day Lara had seen her vanish into the dais contraption.

“My name is Ailema, Queen of Atlantis. That,” she pointed at the Scion, “is the Scion, the holder of all knowledge of the Ancients. You have no right to it, Earth girl.”

This was insane! Her mother was clearly brainwashed.

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Old 09-09-12, 20:08   #26
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CLOSED!

Damn, Rai, that was cutting it fine Go and make yourself a cocoa or something


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