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Old 24-11-22, 17:41   #1
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Default Tomb Raider: The Gift of Brahmā (Fanfic)

Hey guys!

So I finally finished the fanfic I've been writing since god knows when about the plane crash in the Himalayas.

It's a short story and I'm not very confident about my writing (particularly dialogues ) but it's a story I've been wanting to write for a long time and in the end I think I'm actually pretty pleased with how it turned out.

I decided to share it on AO3. Here's a link if you want to give it a read:
https://archiveofourown.org/works/43...ters/108690115

It's divided in seven small "chapters" (it's actually a prologue + 5 chapters + epilogue). The Prologue is set in the 18th century and it's the backstory of what Lara later encounters on the mountains (like the Classics' Intro FMVs with the flashback about the artifacts). Then the next 5 chapters are the actual story of the crash. The Epilogue is set some time after Lara returns home and it's about the falling out with her parents.

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Old 28-11-22, 00:29   #2
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I liked it, the vividly visual style made it flow nicely with no wasted words The relationship dynamic with George was also interesting
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I enjoyed it. I would have liked a little more on Lara's survival on the mountain ranges, rather than jumping ahead, but I enjoyed the action and descriptions in the temple.
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Old 28-11-22, 09:39   #4
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Thank you so much for reading and for your comments! I really appreciate the feedback and I'm so pleased to hear you liked it.

@Rai - yeah, I did cheat a little on that section by jumping forward. I did struggle a little with that choice but the truth is that I didn't really know how to write it properly
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Old 28-11-22, 13:10   #5
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Finally got around to reading this and I must say I really loved it. You did an amazing job, and so much of what you wrote totally spoke to my own head-canon that I have of Lara's plane crash story (like finding a lost monastery and confronting a yeti for the first time). You really gave this story life.

I loved the Prologue, and how you mirrored the classic TR intro FMVs. It particularly reminded me of TR2's intro with the door slamming and the monk being trapped inside. I even heard the same music that plays during that FMV playing in my head.

I thoroughly enjoyed the detailed description you went into during the section in the temple, the puzzle solving, and Lara battling the yeti. I also liked your take on her relationship with George (the Earl of Farrington?) and that Lara was involved with him briefly which shows her as being more than a feelingless ice queen as she is often conceptualized. It also helped strengthen her resolve to live for herself by breaking off the relationship. (I also enjoyed the Downton Abbey easter eggs...).

My only critique would be (like Rai already suggested), if you do ever decide to expand this story, then I would like to read more of the actual crash experience, and definitely a more drawn-out narrative of her post-crash and striving to survive. If we experience a bit more of her struggle, I feel it would carry more weight later on when she declares she could have died in those mountains, but didn't, so now she will not waste a minute of her precious life and live it for herself. Perhaps also a parallel could be made of the oppressive hostile snowy storm surrounding her to the oppressive upper-class upbringing?

All that aside, it was a wonderful story and I hope we get to read more someday.
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Old 28-11-22, 14:56   #6
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^Thank you, snake! As someone who is really insecure it really means the world to read such positive feedback!

When I started this fic, I did conceptualize it as something that could work as a game (maybe not a full game, but maybe as a DLC), like how would I have done Lara's origin story and in my head it needed to start like the Classics, with a flashback to the past. It was really fun coming up with the backstory for the myth and the Yeti.

About George, I was a bit unsure how my take on the relationship was going to be received, since it breaks from the prevalent head-canon within the fandom, so I'm really glad you and Harley liked it. And yes, he's supposed to be the Earl of Farrington from the Classic bio, but I needed to give him a first name! XD

And I knew you would catch the Downton Abbey reference!

I have another story that has been shelved for ages which I would like to pick up again, but if I ever decide to return to this one, I'll be sure to take Rai's and your feedback in consideration and try to expand on the post-crash survival experience.
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